Talk:Heart of a Champion/@comment-5277627-20150623010855/@comment-5277627-20150623050827

I don't want to come across as rude and I'm certainly not attacking you or your fanon. I'm just giving you advice for improvement. Like I said, I think you've got great potential and, hey, this is your first season. It's still pretty good, but I just think you made the winner too obvious. :)

Like, I get what you wanted him to come across as, but it turned into something different. It's kind of like me with one of my fanon characters. I intended him to come across as the likable guy who didn't fit in, but instead he's kinda turning into the guy who just floats around and gets allies by playing the sympathy card. :P

So hey, we all make mistakes, don't take my criticism too hard. You're a great fanon writer and I'm eagerly awaiting your new season. :) Plus, you've got commitment. You've written an entire season in about the same time it took me to write four or five episodes. :D