Talk:It's Open Season, Dude!/@comment-5277627-20191031222028

I really like what you've done so far, Matt! I feel like I have a good idea of who the characters are. I really like Preston, Zach and Reyna, and I don't like Sienna and Kara. One thing I will say is I feel like you're a bit more tell-y than show-y, and for me personally it detracts a bit from reading. Like you'll write something like, "X (skeptical)" and then the line, but I feel it would be better to show us that someone is skeptical instead. Like, I think you had enough to show us the person was skeptical when they raised their eyebrow. I noticed it in a couple of other instances, too. I feel like you don't need to tell us how someone is feeling and it would be a lot more fun to figure it out ourselves from being shown it. :)

Just a small thing, and like I said, I really like the first day already! You have a great cast here and I can't wait to see what happens with day two. :)